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He sits on the bed, bent over with his fingers interlaced on top of his head. Her words echoing down the hallway are still burning in his ears. Why does daddy like making me afraid of him? The man lowers his hands and lifts one of them to still his trembling lips. I'm scared he's going to hurt me. He blinks, trying desperately to hold the tears back. Does daddy even love me Mama?  The man gives up and starts to weep uncontrollably, his back shaking with every sob. Why does he scream at me so much? He looks up and his words are barely audible. "I'm so sorry." The man can taste salty tears on his lips. Mama, I'm so scared. I want to die. He can still see her sitting there wearing a white night gown, her dead mother's dress spread on her lap. Mama I'm coming to you. "No!" He screams, reaching for something that's no longer there. I love you Mama. The girl says as she lifts the knife with quivering hands, and plunges it into her heart. "No." He whispers, and the darkness closes in on him. His daughter's deep blue eyes look up at him, filled with tears and sorrow. And from her bloody lips he still can hear her last words. I love you daddy. Liquid crimson is spreading over the wedding dress the little girl clutches in her dying fingers. Her words won't stop singing in his ears, like the grief filled symphony of the dead. I love you so much. The man hangs his head, and all that can be heard in the room are his heart wrenching sobs. I forgive you.
*sigh* Emotions are interesting things....anyway, I appologize for this being so sad. I hope you like it anyway. Please comment and tell me what you think. And this is NOT endorsing suicide! I strongly stand against suicide, it causes so much pain. However I had to express these feelings and thoughts, so somehow this is the way it came out....
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DRAGONlolidk123 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
o.O that's so dark and said.. you pretty much blew me away. I feel sorry for the man. Love it :D
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really glad you enjoyed it, even though the stories sad.
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DRAGONlolidk123 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
Yesssss:D
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconimhappyplz:
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DRAGONlolidk123 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
loks like a derp face :D
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really, dost thou think so?
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DRAGONlolidk123 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I really dost thinkest that of which is derpy.. I don't even know...:D
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hehehe:D
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cheddarofallcheese Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student General Artist
;A; duuuuudddeeeeee its so dark <3
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah....do you like it?
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cheddarofallcheese Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Yess C:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Phew! And thank you:)
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cheddarofallcheese Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Student General Artist
you're welcome
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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kapanihan Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
._.
I had to hold back tears.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really? Wow....
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FunsizeLovesDonuts Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
This is a very powerful piece. It really grabs you by the heart. You can really feel the man's grief and whatnot. It's sad, but I think you did a really good job.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much!
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FunsizeLovesDonuts Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
:D You're welcome.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:squee:
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Wow, this is...Ehw..This candy I just ate taste awful.. oxo
ANYWHOO- This has such a string image.
Pure agony to it.
Longing to change something that can no longer be fixed, as if a sense of losing your mind comes into play.
I may be completely off, but congratulations. Another fabulous piece of art-work.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I hate it when candy tastes bad! :D
And that's exactly what I wanted it to convey. I'm so very glad it did! Thank you!
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LOL, Sorry, I meant "Strong" image. I apologize. Speed typing is not a great talent of mine.
You conveyed even more then that with this piece.
Stunning.
You're very welcome! c:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww:) I am very touched!
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I'm so glad you are! c:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconsuperglompplz:
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MorgueThanAFeeling Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is deliciously dark, it's beautiful and so vivid. I swear at one point that I could taste tears in my own mouth and even smell the blood. Not many people can evoke such emotions through words alone, really great job. :)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, really? Thank you so much! That's more than I ever hoped it could make someone feel!
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MorgueThanAFeeling Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes. Really! :D
You're welcome!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow....thank you! :happybounce: One thing though, this doesn't come off as making suicide look cool does it? Because that's not its purpose.....:worry:
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MorgueThanAFeeling Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No, this piece definitely doesn't make suicide seem cool at all.

This is going to sound really odd, but when I was reading it suicide didn't really cross my mind. Of course I was fully engaged in the little girls part and aware that she killed herself. But my attention was more focused on the way that you potrayed the man and the emotions that he was dealing with.

I'm sure nobody will read this and think that you're trying to promote suicide. Don't worry about it. :)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Phew!

And that's not odd at all, in fact that was what I was hoping it would be like for my readers, to feel both the girl's and father's intense emotions, to intimately know what they experienced.
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