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She walked home on a normal afternoon.
Hadn't seen her sister since she ran away from school.
They'd mocked her once again.
The words never seemed to end.

That's when she saw her, and the girl's heart nearly stopped.
Her big sister hung in the stairwell on a rope drawn taught.

Life long departed, eyes glazed and empty.
The little girl stared unable to breathe.
Books fell from her dead fingers and she went to her knees.
Tears ran down her cheeks and she couldn't halt the screams.

Those words had been the last straw.
Scars had been torn open and left raw.
She decided this was the last time,
They'd have the power to destroy her life.

Thought this was the path to peace,
When her heart finally would cease.
But now the broken pieces are left for those whom she loved,
When at last she chose to give up.
Today was her last day,
As her soul fades to gray.


She stared at the casket with a soul gone numb.
This is what they'd made her sister become.
She couldn't even feel her parents embrace,
As she stared at her sibling's ashen face.

Today had been the last straw.
Scars had been torn open and left raw.
She decided this was the last time,
They'd have the power to destroy her life.

Thought this was the path to peace,
When her heart finally would cease.
But now the broken pieces are left for those whom she loved,
When at last she chose to give up.
Today was her last day,
As her soul fades to gray.


That day had pushed her over the edge,
With the things that those kids said.
Claimed it would be better if she'd never lived.
And she had no fight left to give.
Would it have made a difference if they'd known,
She was going to die once she reached home?

Today had been the last straw.
Scars had been torn open and left raw.
She decided this was the last time,
They'd have the power to destroy her life.

Thought this was the path to peace,
When her heart finally would cease.
But now the broken pieces are left for those whom she loved,
When at last she chose to give up.
Today was her last day,
As her soul fades to gray.


Please know I'm sorry,
Hate drove you to this.
Oh why were you left in agony?
Each word created your desire for the dark abyss.
Believed the lies until you drowned in their sea.
Easing the sorrow became your only wish.

Pain can sometimes seem too great.
Regret is the companion of those who live still.
Inside your heart the grief ate away.
Never realized you were drowning in fear until,
Clouds drew over your last day.
Ebony dwells in the space that you used to fill.
This is written for a girl whose pain wasn't found until too late. Read the first letter of each sentence in the last two paragraphs and you'll know who it's about.
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MakaxSoulx Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautiful.
It makes me think of why, when things get overbearing and I think I can't go on, I don't seriously consider taking my life. I wouldn't want my little angel sister to have to deal with that.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! You saying that means everything to me.

Me too. Its too horrible for your family to deal with.
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MakaxSoulx Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome, dear.

yeah, its just awful.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*smiles*

Yeah it is. My wish is for a song like this to make someone think twice in a dark moment.
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S-catchy-Cookie Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconsadplz: made me nearly cry. Awesomely written as usual. May I ask who Phoebe Prince is...or was?
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow....that really amazes me. Thank you so much! And she was a 15 year old girl who committed suicide because of severe bullying. Here's some information about her: [link]
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S-catchy-Cookie Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's so sad... but it was nice of you to dedicate this song to her!
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Elixa-Carr Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
:cry: It's beautiful... It's tragic... Your skill is amazing...
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*faints* Thank you! :tighthug: That is absolutely stunning to hear!
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Elixa-Carr Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student Writer
:D Nothing less fur du! :glomp:
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Omg. This. You have such talent. I want to cry.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: You...really think so? Thank you, from the bottom of my heart!
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome(:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*huggles*
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I recently had a friend who committed suicide and I felt terrible because I saw something was amiss but didn't do anything.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And please don't blame yourself. It will only eat you away. Sometimes we only realize things when we look back and can't see them at the time.
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think she wouldn't want me to.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree. I don't think your friend would want you to either.
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MonsieurEviltrees Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This is so emotional. Fantastically written, wonderful job!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, from the bottom of my heart! You saying that means so much!
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MonsieurEviltrees Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm glad to hear it! :D
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FunsizeLovesDonuts Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012
There is so much emotion in this! :( It's so sad.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
There really is? I'm so glad! And yes....the true events I based it off of are heartbreaking.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*more huggle snuggles*
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notchthegreat Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
SOOOOO sad
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*nods* I wish Phoebe Prince had known she wasn't worthless.
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K10Dasie Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
I love this. It's so emotional. There are kids and bullies in this world don't know when too stop untill it's too late. And only them are they sorry. Words can hurt and cut deeper than anything else, so think before you speak.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, so very much! That means everything to know! And absolutely! Words can kill sure as bullets. People don't fully realize the power they hold. Cruel words can destroy someone's mind and heart in a matter of seconds.
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PackRatTheArtist Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow. Such a great message. I wish I could show this to everyone!!! XD It's something that everyone needs to hear. Again, you amaze me with your great rhyming talent! This is beautiful!!! AND HEY!!!!! Where's the rest of your book!!! I misses it... :(
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, so so much! That just...means everything to hear! And hopefully they will someday, once I can sing it. Awwww gosh:) :blush: Really? Thank you!

And um....I have to get back to it. Life interuppted my story writing, grrrr! I'm actually going to be working on it after dinner tonight.
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Music-lover-Alex Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
I love this it's true and i can connect with it
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you from the bottom of my heart! That's exactly what I hoped this piece would be and do.
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Music-lover-Alex Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
you have a real talent with words that shines through in this piece. It's beautifully written and so wonderfully descriptive to the point you can put yourself and your family into it and feel those deep tugs of emotion that you, your family and your friends would feel in that moment, causing you to think and be inspired in your own way. This has inspired me to draw a character from a story that I'm currently writing (being that i cant draw well i mean line art for now) again love your work +llama and watcher
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*blushes a bit* Thank you so much! I was wanting to portray just that, to try and express what it would feel like to go through such a horrible event. I mean I don't know exactly what it would be like, but I imagined how I'd feel in that situation and went with it. 
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Music-lover-Alex Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
you were spot on and worded it beautifully; making the reader not only think but actually feel whats going on  and witness the senerio in their own minds& heart. You will make amazing author one day with the extensive vocabulary and emotion that goes into every one of your pieces~
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow....I'm....amazed. Just.....thank you! You're so so kind. Thank you! :tighthug:
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Music-lover-Alex Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
no problem~ :) I love helping people~
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do too. Its really wonderful making someones day better, even if its only a little bit. 
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LadyMuffinArt Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student General Artist
...once again, my former self can identify with this. So well captured!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, really? And thank you! I'm absolutely delighted that this song was able to express it. I hope it helps you in some way, even if just a little.
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LadyMuffinArt Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student General Artist
:) I think dA has taught me very much, that I was not the only one wit such problems! It used to be so easy for me to think that my problems are so much bigger than everyone else's! True, some people have less problems, but we all are acquainted to suffering.
And yes, your writings call that back into memory over and over again! I think it's good to remember where I was & who I have become since I began my walk with CHRIST! And that there are still people out there who are going through that phase.....
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*nods* Knowing we're not alone in the problems we face is comforting somehow. Having someone who can relate to our memories and emotions helps so much, whether its personal or in a poem.

That's true. I often think about how God helped me stay alive and loved me in the darkest time in my life. Knowing He's always there and will always love me always quiets my mind and heart when they're in turmoil.
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LadyMuffinArt Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Yes. I most certainly think that I wouldn't be alive today if God hadn't helped me. Or at least I wouldn't have a life that I feel is worth living. He has helped me to thank him for my darkest times, because when I was weak he was my strength.
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Markuskus555 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
By God, that is fantastic!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! You think so?
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xXMiracleMoonXx Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
Omg this is really good. I shivered. it's so sad but telling the truth.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!!! That's SO absolutely wonderful to hear! You did? Wow....:faint: And very true. I hope someday it'll make a difference.
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