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One's scars are not simply disfigurements,
They tell a vivid story written in blood and skin.
Why do people's icy stares never relent,
When this is pain they've never been in?

I know hope is there.
Because its the only reason why,
I held on when no one cared,
And didn't give up inside.

I want to break the surface,
Of the sorrow's hold.
I believe each life has a purpose.
So bring to life my soul.


I don't want to die,
That wasn't the reason this began.
All I desire is to survive,
And get out of this dark land.

I know hope is there.
Because its the only reason why,
I held on when no one cared,
And didn't give up inside.

I want to break the surface,
Of the sorrow's hold.
I believe each life has a purpose.
So bring to life my soul.


Some people are angels,
And some are monsters without disguise.
For a while I believed none were truly faithful,
Or wanted to comfort the tears you cry.

But I discovered if you look hard enough,
There are those who will,
Always give you their love.
Even when their own tears are spilled.

I know hope is there.
Because its the only reason why,
I held on when no one cared,
And didn't give up inside.

I want to break the surface,
Of the sorrow's hold.
I believe each life has a purpose.
So bring to life my soul.


Despite the scars I wear,
And the places that I've been.
I know there are those who care,
And will help me no matter where or when.

I know hope is there.
Because its the only reason why,
I held on when no one cared,
And didn't give up inside.

I want to break the surface,
Of the sorrow's hold.
I believe each life has a purpose.
So bring to life my soul.
I just wrote this and thought it was good enough to post. Please tell me how it made you feel and think!
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TheFireAndTheFury Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012
This is very powerful and expressive.

"One's scars are not simply disfigurements,
They tell a vivid story written in blood and skin.
Why do people's icy stares never relent,
When this is pain they've never been in?"
Fantastic lines. :]
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, so very much! That's fantastic to hear! I'm really happy it's powerful and also beautiful:)
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MakaxSoulx Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This gives me hope for a better situation. And reminds me that there are those who care about me.
you are a true angel, a messenger of God.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad it does! I wanted this song to do just that.

:blush: Thank you so much! I want to help others, and I believe its what He desires for me to do with my life.
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MakaxSoulx Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is wonderful to hear! And I think you are well on your way to helping others just by writing what you feel inside.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Again, thank you dear! Thank you for believing in me, and for caring about me. It means so much! :tighthug:
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Minnie1995 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Student Writer
I love it! :D
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You do? I'M SO THRILLED YOU DO!!!! :happybounce: Thank you!!!!
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Minnie1995 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!!! :meow:
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Elixa-Carr Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
I love it! (Albeit I sound like a broken record again.) It made me think of all the amazing people I know... You, Racheal, Gia, Nana... Others are supportive too, but those specifically I'd trust with my life.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're not a broken record! I'm just thrilled all my work warrants that response from you:) o.O Really? I'm...absolutely honored! And I don't take that trust lightly. Also I include you in the category of complete trust too.
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Elixa-Carr Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
:) Words aren't enough... Love ya' sissy.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love you too, so so much! I miss talking to you sweetie. I'll probably try to call you tomorrow afternoon.
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Elixa-Carr Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
:D Ya' did! 'Twas fun. .u.
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FunsizeLovesDonuts Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
I really like this one. It has hope and good feelings, in a way. It shows that someone has struggled, but they keep on going and whatnot.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you Funsize, very much! And yes, a lot of me was expressed in it. I'm so glad the message was clearly portrayed!
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FunsizeLovesDonuts Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012
:tighthug: Welcome~
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marcphx Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Professional General Artist
That's beautiful! I particularly love the chorus. I see someone who has suffered a lot, who's struggling to move on, but still has hope, someone who refuses to give up and still has loved ones who believe in them. Such a strong message! :nod:

I can't wait to hear all your songs someday! :happybounce:
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, very much! And I'm so glad the chorus means a lot to you!

And it paints that story for you? That's wonderful, because its what I was thinking and drawing from.

Awwww:) :blush: Thank you so much! It just thrills me to hear!
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
HOW DO YOU COME UP WITH SUCH WIZARDRY?!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awwwww:) :blush: Thank you so much for the compliment! You really think so? And....I don't know. I just write and the words get there somehow.
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really think so(: You're lucky. I have to try so hard.
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*smiles deeply happy* Just...thank you! And it is a valuable gift. The thing is though that even though me being able to write without thinking about it may be amazing, its actually more admirable when someone works and perfects a skill on their own. Because my gift means I cannot claim it reflects on my brilliance. Its something that was simply given to me. So if you think of it that way, your work is more amazing than mine.
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Alana-Lyn Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't even try to make me outshine you! While I understand where you're coming from, rest assured that you're still amazing.
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful! There is a hint of light, and denial in it, but written with thoughtful images. :)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much! It means everything to me. And I'm curious, what do you mean 'denial'?
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Like a sense of trying to repress those negative emotions that still lie there :)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhh. I suppose you can see that in this piece from a certain perspective. That's something I like about writing, people see different stories in what you've created that you didn't think about.
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LadyMuffinArt Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student General Artist
Your poetry always makes me hold my breath!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: It...does? I'm absolutely amazed....thank you, so so much!
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LadyMuffinArt Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student General Artist
Yes, really does!!!! :D Or maybe, I forget to breathe, because it goes very deep!
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*smiles with tears in eyes* That touched me very powerfully. Thank you. Thank you so much.
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notchthegreat Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is happier than others I tend to read. Well done old chap, *golf clap*
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed:) And thank you very much! *curtsies*
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xXMiracleMoonXx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
"I Belive each life has a purpose. So bring to life my soul" .. I love it. well it been a while xD that I wrote and read something. but this is really good. I do think the same way and it made me calm. because I know the people will read this and say: yes I think so too. you are really good in writing emotions so that people will feel the same. keep on going =) ( I hope my english isn't so bad, so everybody understands what I mean XD)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you SO much! Gosh:) I do? That's absolutely amazing to hear! And it makes me really happy:) I promise I will!

And don't worry, you're completely understandable!
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xXMiracleMoonXx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
aww makes me happy to hear your happy *^*okay thats great to hear =D ... puh XD good
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: You're so wonderful! And awwww:) Mhmm!
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xXMiracleMoonXx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
*hugs* :* you to dear ;)
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Retrubutionist777 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: Thank you!
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